'Preliminary exercise learner response'

1)  WWW: You have a clear message running throughout your magazine which is consistent from your cover image to your article within. The use of a business-like setting along with the corporate attire pushes the narrative of this hard-working protagonist.

Next Steps: At the moment, you don’t have a clear masthead or headline. You simply have the name of your author written at the top of the image. Choose a corporate sounding name for your magazine that would plausibly write an article on this sort of subject. I also need to see some original photography in your real magazine, not only on your cover image, but also within your double-page spread. Perhaps you can mirror some of the ideas from the image that you found here. Inside the magazine, I think you need to reconsider the writing style used here. At the minute this reads as more of a description of what the article will be about rather than the article itself. Remember, you are writing as a journalist about an influencer of sorts that is promoting a book that is focused on a social issue of your choice: try to make this idea clear.

2) I have added a clear message that I want the readers to know about and used examples of my protagonist's life.

3) I have learned that I need to add a clear headline to make it sound more important with adding images on the double page and to write like it is a article rather than a description.